Really amazed by your writing style. wow good work Clara Victor. Great start. "I like that quotation" but i have so many concerns regarding this essay. 1 - I feel paragraph 1 and two on page 1 could be shortened. i feel waste of words there. Remember Words limit. 2 - i feel your magical spell is missing there, that smartly says everything avoiding waste of words in details of the essay as well. 3- it would be better if you choose something short for ending this. This Quote is nice, it fits the ending. but try something different to say in word limit 100 - 120 words
Really amazed by your writing style. wow good work Clara Victor.
ReplyDeleteGreat start. "I like that quotation"
but i have so many concerns regarding this essay.
1 - I feel paragraph 1 and two on page 1 could be shortened. i feel waste of words there. Remember Words limit.
2 - i feel your magical spell is missing there, that smartly says everything avoiding waste of words in details of the essay as well.
3- it would be better if you choose something short for ending this. This Quote is nice, it fits the ending. but try something different to say in word limit 100 - 120 words