RIJA: I AM REALLY VERY HAPPY TO SEE YOUR EFFORTS, GOOD WORK, GOOD TRY, KEEP IT UP BUT THERE ARE A FEW THINGS THAT YOU NEED TO FOCUS. 1 - YOU NEED TO WORK ON INTRODUCTION. MAKE IT ABIT MORE ATTRACTIVE BY ADDING SOME QUOTATIONS.
2 - SPELLING MISTAKES ARE THE REAL PROBLEM, ITS ACTUALLY BURNS THE CAKE, IT SPOILS THE TASTE OF WHOLE THING. THERE ARE SPELLING MISTAKES. HAVE A CLOSE WATCH ON THEM.
3 - I FEEL YOU CAN REDUCE EACH PARAGRAPH BY ONE OR TWO LINES BY AVOIDING OVER EXPLANATION. 4 - TO MY FINEST ANALYSIS IT HAS EXCEEDED 100- 120 WORDS LIMIT ITS ABOVE 180 WORDS.
THE REAL CHALLENGE OF CREATIVE WRITING IS TO EXPRESS WHAT YOU HAVE IN MIND IN LIMITED WORDS. USE VOCABULARY THAT EXPRESS WHAT U HAVE IN MIND IN PLACE OF PHRASES. PHRASES EXCEED WORD LIMITS.
REMEMBER YOUR MISTAKES GETS YOU ONE STEP CLOSER TO YOUR SUCCESS. KEEP IT UP. KEEP TRYING. GOOD LUCK
RIJA: I AM REALLY VERY HAPPY TO SEE YOUR EFFORTS, GOOD WORK, GOOD TRY, KEEP IT UP BUT THERE ARE A FEW THINGS THAT YOU NEED TO FOCUS.
ReplyDelete1 - YOU NEED TO WORK ON INTRODUCTION.
MAKE IT ABIT MORE ATTRACTIVE BY ADDING SOME QUOTATIONS.
2 - SPELLING MISTAKES ARE THE REAL PROBLEM, ITS ACTUALLY BURNS THE CAKE, IT SPOILS THE TASTE OF WHOLE THING. THERE ARE SPELLING MISTAKES. HAVE A CLOSE WATCH ON THEM.
3 - I FEEL YOU CAN REDUCE EACH PARAGRAPH BY ONE OR TWO LINES BY AVOIDING OVER EXPLANATION.
4 - TO MY FINEST ANALYSIS IT HAS EXCEEDED 100- 120 WORDS LIMIT ITS ABOVE 180 WORDS.
THE REAL CHALLENGE OF CREATIVE WRITING IS TO EXPRESS WHAT YOU HAVE IN MIND IN LIMITED WORDS. USE VOCABULARY THAT EXPRESS WHAT U HAVE IN MIND IN PLACE OF PHRASES. PHRASES EXCEED WORD LIMITS.
REMEMBER YOUR MISTAKES GETS YOU ONE STEP CLOSER TO YOUR SUCCESS. KEEP IT UP. KEEP TRYING. GOOD LUCK
ohkie i'll do the corrections..... THANKX :)
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